setrida
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Post by setrida on Nov 20, 2008 22:18:28 GMT -5
Oh, yeah. It's okay. It does sound sort of cliched, but Parker really was just like the perfect guy so I guess it kind of works. He was one of those kids you see in movies and go "pshha... that would so never happen in real life." So, yeah...
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Post by Raihor on Nov 20, 2008 22:35:27 GMT -5
Hah! So they can exist...
It's just too unfair, things like what happened...
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Post by setrida on Nov 20, 2008 23:00:07 GMT -5
Yeah. I mean, he turned a corner, the car hydroplaned and flipped, and that was it. I didn't know him extremely well, but he was one of my brother's best friends. It's just sad that life is so short.
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Post by zemira on Nov 24, 2008 10:05:01 GMT -5
That happened to my cousin's first girlfriend. A truly sweet girl, and they were engaged to be married. Our family adored her. Then, one night, she was driving home, and was hit by a truck. She didn't die right away, which was actually worse, because she was in a lot of pain. The doctors had to reconstruct her entire skull, as it had been crushed, and her brain had started to come out of the holes in it. It was one of the saddest funerals I've ever been to. But, yeah, it does happen. And the fact that it happened to someone you knew makes the poem mean more.
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Post by Raihor on Nov 24, 2008 11:40:13 GMT -5
All I can say is... I have a cheer-up thread. I think I need it now. Be sure to head over there if you need it.
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Post by setrida on Nov 24, 2008 18:37:24 GMT -5
I'm sorry about your cousin's girlfriend. That's terrible.
And I think I may head over to that cheer-up thread myself, now...
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Post by setrida on Dec 1, 2008 21:49:23 GMT -5
So, for creative writing I had to write a poem for the theme 'Siren Song: Temptation' and this was what I came up with:
Just a Taste
It was just once Just a try, a taste No more, no less Just a little test
He loves me He loves me not Older, Wiser All I could want
It was just a test To see if he did Love me Or love me not
But giving it all Was more More then a taste More then a try
He loves me not Loves me not I was just a taste Just a little test
Thoughts? Comments?
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Post by Raihor on Dec 1, 2008 23:04:46 GMT -5
I liiiiike! That's the only thought I can provide! :3
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Post by zemira on Dec 2, 2008 8:37:08 GMT -5
Sounds like a vampire, lol.
I liked it, except for this bit:
"It was just a test To see if he did Love me Or love me not"
Just didn't flow as well as your other verses. At least to me.
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Post by setrida on Dec 2, 2008 22:43:16 GMT -5
Thanks! Hmm... yeah, that's true... It doesn't flow very well, does it? I'm just not really sure how to change it... I'll think on it.
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