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Post by kaiku on Jan 23, 2009 15:45:01 GMT -5
Gore doesn't really bother me in terms of making me feel sick, but it does bother me when a film tries to cram in as much as possible in an hour and a half in an attempt to make it "scary". *cough*Saw*cough*. I much prefer horror films that rely on atmosphere rather than blood. Anyway, I agree that it is actually hard to find a good place to split the two long paragraphs. I looked at paragraph four and thought that in between these two sentences might be a good place: because the first part seems to be focusing on her feelings about what has happened, and the second part on the changes in her appearance. Zemira's right though; it's not essential to split them up. I just thought it might make it easier to follow .
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Post by zemira on Jan 23, 2009 17:03:59 GMT -5
Saw isn't scary, but it's fun because of the senseless violence. It makes me giggle. But if I want a good story and the ability to re-watch, then I go for creepy (Silence of the Lambs, Sleepy Hollow, Halloween, etc.). ^_^ Hmm, and, Becca, yeah, that could probably work. Might need some sentences re-worked though to fix any broken flow.
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Post by Raihor on Jan 23, 2009 17:17:28 GMT -5
*Puts on goggles and overalls* Let's 'ave a look at this...
Yeah, I could change that. But it'd need a little tweaking (which would improve the overall quality anyway), thanks, Becca!
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